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钓月[Fishmoon] 钓月作品集 九品县令 (一不小心,做了官儿了。)
注册时间: 2008-05-04 帖子: 28 来自: 中国江苏淮安
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发表于: 星期五 五月 16, 2008 9:10 am 发表主题: Yesterday (an original bilingual poem) |
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Yesterday (an original bilingual poem)
By Fishmoon
Yesterday, the white snow in the fields
Ignited our inspirations.
With snowmen, sledges and snowballs,
We cordially urged winter god to stay, .
Laughing, playing and chasing, though,
To be winter prisoners we weren’t willing.
In the white dreamland,
Babbling on, the melody of spring
昨 天(双语原创)
钓月
咋天,大野的白雪,
点燃我们灵感;
用雪人、雪橇、雪球,
欲将冬神款留。
我们嬉笑追逐着,
终不愿作冬囚。
在白色梦境中,
春韵在潺潺地流。 _________________ 欲钓那只太阳,却钓了一轮月亮
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期五 五月 16, 2008 10:32 pm 发表主题: Re: Yesterday (an original bilingual poem) |
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I like the last two lines.
The melody comes from the melting snows; just listen, the song of spring reverberates through the air.
钓月 写到: |
We cordially urged winter god to stay, .
Laughing, playing and chasing, though,
To be winter prisoners we weren’t willing.
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My suggestions are as follows:
1 the winter god (or the god of winter)
2 winter's prisoners _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期六 五月 17, 2008 8:21 am 发表主题: Re: Yesterday (an original bilingual poem) |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
钓月 写到: |
We cordially urged winter god to stay, .
Laughing, playing and chasing, though,
To be winter prisoners we weren’t willing.
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My suggestions are as follows:
1 the winter god (or the god of winter)
2 winter's prisoners |
Or Valind ? It's more succinct. He is the God of winter, a son of Vadrus and an unnamed slave goddess. He is the source of the winter powers which sweep over the earth. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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