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timmid · 发表于: 星期六十二月 18, 2004 4:33 am 发表主题: I Found Myself

I Found Myself

In the unknown recess
I found me
Falling between God and Devil
Dying for rescue from either
With respect for neither

In the known recess
I found me
Sandwiched between me and others
Pushed by unconsciousness and consciousness
Without any awareness of my destination

In me
I found life
Entangled with somethingness and nothingness
towards nowhere else
but death
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timmid · 发表于: 星期六十二月 18, 2004 4:40 am 发表主题:

My first English poem(if I dare to call it) from my 2-weeks' illness. Rythem and other ingredients in an English poem pose great difficulties for me to conquer. Just say hello to all.
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timmid · 发表于: 星期六十二月 18, 2004 4:50 am 发表主题:

In the unknown recess
I found me
Falling between God and Devil
Dying for rescue from either
With respect for neither

In the known recess
I found me
Sandwiched between me and others
Pushed by the belonging to either
With knowledge of neither

In the recess
I found me
Entangled with somethingness and nothingness
Swerving between choices
To be or not to be
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无话可说

晓鸣 · 发表于: 星期六十二月 18, 2004 6:38 am 发表主题:

直面矛盾,深入解剖人性.语句工整而不拘泥.

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期日十二月 19, 2004 5:08 pm 发表主题:

现代的不确定性

星子 · 发表于: 星期日十二月 19, 2004 5:13 pm 发表主题:

Good. I like it.

it flows well and full of wits
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timmid · 发表于: 星期日十二月 19, 2004 8:38 pm 发表主题:

thanks for your encouragement
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