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星子[ANNA] 星子作品集 酷我!I made it!
注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期六 十月 16, 2004 9:51 pm 发表主题: If you love me |
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---revised--
if you love me,
please listen to my heart.
never let my tears
fall down alone.
Love is so tender
that stones cannot feel
but leaves embrace it
without fear.
When the wind blows,
their rustle resonates.
Though frost make them brittle,
they blaze their last passion;
When bare branches stipple night,
they bury sorrow below.
my tears fall
and soak through my soul.
---old---
If you love me,
please listen to my heart.
never let my tear
fall down alone.
Love is so tender
that stones cannot bear
but leaves embrace it
without fear.
When the wind blows,
they resonate in rustle.
Yet they perceive frost,
their flame burn their last passion;
and love will dies soon.
With bare branches stipple night,
they bury sorrow below.
my tears fall
and soak through my soul.
最后进行编辑的是 星子 on 星期日 十月 17, 2004 9:24 pm, 总计第 2 次编辑 |
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白水[FFFFFF] 白水作品集 一品翰林院大学士 (酷我!I made it!)
注册时间: 2004-05-16 帖子: 9025 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期日 十月 17, 2004 7:29 am 发表主题: |
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Love is so tender |
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艺芳[风来疏竹] 艺芳作品集 二品总督总管 (回首人生,前途在望)
注册时间: 2004-07-27 帖子: 2966
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发表于: 星期日 十月 17, 2004 8:15 am 发表主题: |
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anni, if you love me , please come to see me ! hei ,hei _________________ 风来意在疏竹,雁过了无痕迹! |
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肖今[King] 肖今作品集 一品翰林院大学士 (酷我!I made it!)
注册时间: 2004-06-16 帖子: 5783 来自: Free sky
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发表于: 星期日 十月 17, 2004 8:55 am 发表主题: |
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I love u,sister
xixi _________________ ░░破茧成蝶 眼泪,从此不咸░░
NO FOREVER , ONLY LONGER! |
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星子[ANNA] 星子作品集 酷我!I made it!
注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期日 十月 17, 2004 3:13 pm 发表主题: |
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谢谢各位厚爱。。。
我批我诗,Sorry, lies should be "lie",
burn should be " burns"
This should be more unique and need to toss the big and general words: "love", "soul", "heart"..... _________________
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风动[风动] 风动作品集 二品总督总管 (回首人生,前途在望)
注册时间: 2004-10-13 帖子: 4944 来自: TORONTO
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发表于: 星期日 十月 17, 2004 5:50 pm 发表主题: |
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最后进行编辑的是 风动 on 星期五 十月 22, 2004 6:33 pm, 总计第 2 次编辑 |
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星子[ANNA] 星子作品集 酷我!I made it!
注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期二 十月 19, 2004 9:50 pm 发表主题: |
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my tears fall
and soak through my soul.
----------can be tossed away.... _________________
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晓鸣[自己的敌人] 晓鸣作品集 Site Admin
注册时间: 2004-05-05 帖子: 9474 来自: 加拿大多伦多
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发表于: 星期三 十月 20, 2004 8:05 am 发表主题: |
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看样子对这首诗的点评是半边天亮.男士们对情感诗的欣赏要迟钝一些. |
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