酷我-北美枫

星子 · 发表于: 星期四五月 04, 2006 8:00 am 发表主题: Fame

Unpolished in shadow,
its sharp edges obscured.

Someone embrace it
by honing his heart,
until it turns into a pearl.

Once its brightness lets out,
ravens screech by
with rumor as weapon.

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期四五月 04, 2006 12:41 pm 发表主题:

真好
深入了

星子 · 发表于: 星期五五月 05, 2006 4:25 pm 发表主题:

For those who chases after fame, fame abandons him,
for those who leaves fame, fame chases after him.

(I believe...trust your inner power, no one can deny it)
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星子 · 发表于: 星期日五月 07, 2006 10:43 am 发表主题:

Yesterday I went to TOPS' workshop. I have brought <<NOrth American Maple>> to share, they are very excited and praised it highly.

And Elka sent email out to let people know the chinese-english magazine and our web link to promote it.

Thanks.

Then for our critique session, every one shared a poem and suggestions.

we discussed this poem and they gave me some wonderful suggestions.

Today, I revised it as:

Unwrapped somewhere,
its sharp edges obscured.

Someone embraced it
by honing his heart,
until it turned into a pearl.

Once its bright let out,
ravens screeched by
with rumor as weapon.
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和平岛 · 发表于: 星期日五月 07, 2006 2:24 pm 发表主题:

好!

修改后更有棱角啦
Very Happy

星子 · 发表于: 星期日五月 07, 2006 2:53 pm 发表主题:

Thanks Peace. The previous one was not very clear since some images were disconnected.

This one is better, since it could be viewed " Fame" as the pearl wrapped inside the shell, took time to hone it....
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