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Stella · 发表于: 星期六一月 07, 2006 9:48 pm 发表主题: Tears of Stella

Snow invading
My mind stretching
No graceful flakes
Just specs falling to their fates

Some embracing
Some fighting
Some accumulating
Some disappearing
The sky is a hell of confusion

Trees piled by the sky’s perspiration,
My heart burnt with desperation…

I run, I rest, I hide, I seek
Turn around, the haunter still streaks

I push, I pull, I loose, I hold, I go
Open my hands, see melting snow

I beat, I fight, I shake, I bite
Photo frames fragments in the light

I wonder, I try, I ask, why
My voice disappears in the sky

I knock, I shock, I hate, I despair
Life is a dying affair

Stella, the tears out of a woman’s eye

星子 · 发表于: 星期六一月 07, 2006 9:53 pm 发表主题:

some images are good.

some are cliche.

welcome. keep on writing.
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白水 · 发表于: 星期日一月 29, 2006 9:22 pm 发表主题:

It's very touched, I can hear your true felling

Stella

I will try to practice more.

Thanks! I appreciate it.

秋叶 · 发表于: 星期一一月 30, 2006 5:43 am 发表主题:

Wonderful, good use of rhyme in your poem.