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白水 · 发表于: 星期二五月 02, 2006 8:53 pm 发表主题: Hard Dancer

Hard Dancer

“Water, water!
You have to get the feeling from water,
You have to drop the tear from your finger.

Stoop, stoop!
you should be stoop your waist
with your piety
and bow your head

Yes! This is what I want you to do
If you want to be a best dancer”

Slowly, I lift up my eyes
And tell you clearly:
” No, I can’t do this,
my honoured teacher.
This hurts my bone,
not the one in my body,
but in my heart.”

朋友们, 批吧, 这算诗歌吗? 或仅仅是瞬间的感觉:
“水, 水!” 昨日排练西藏舞蹈, 老师一再强调要找水一样的感觉, 柔,塌腰, 低头, 忍辱负重,小于90度的鞠躬以表虔诚……
不禁感慨: 中国人……
舞, 接着跳, 为了朋友的一个承诺, 虽然腰痛…….

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期二五月 02, 2006 9:32 pm 发表主题:

You have to drop the tear from your finger.

精彩呀

后面直白了一点
总体非常好的

白水 · 发表于: 星期二五月 02, 2006 9:53 pm 发表主题:

白水 · 发表于: 星期日五月 21, 2006 7:02 pm 发表主题:

我把这首诗歌帖西人网站, 得到许多鼓励和帮助, 稍作了点修改, 他们认为这样好多了.
有时, 一字之差, 逻辑上就会出问题 Embarassed

“Water, water!
you have to get the feeling from water,
you have to drop the tear from your finger.

Stoop, stoop!
you should be stoop from your waist .
with your piety
and bow your head.

Yes! This is what I want you to do
if you want to be a best dancer”

Slowly, I lift up my eyes
and tell you clearly:
” No, I can not do this,
my honoured teacher.
this hurts my bone,
not the one in my back,
but in my heart.”