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雪泥

Mystery
by John.J.Olson

A mystery is slipping away,
and shadows of my
younger days slip by.

translated by Michelle Reisdorf

秘密
约翰•J•奥尔松

一个秘密正悄悄溜走，
那些过往日子留下的影子
也随之逝去。

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雪泥 · 发表于: 星期一五月 08, 2006 2:57 pm 发表主题:

It is short and pithy，there is much philosophy in it. The style also reminds me of Japanese ancient poetry .

我的外国诗友有时都来看看，所以请回复时尽量使用英文。
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星子 · 发表于: 星期一五月 08, 2006 9:22 pm 发表主题:

It is a little bit like haiku.
( haiku used ofter on natural scene)

This is good, but not very unique and fresh.

and in such a short poem, since mistery has already been used as title, it should not been used again.
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雪泥 · 发表于: 星期二五月 09, 2006 2:28 am 发表主题:

it is not haiku
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雪泥 · 发表于: 星期二五月 09, 2006 3:48 am 发表主题:

'It came from the poetry in motion tiles you can pick from five tiles to twenty. Given on the board of words found there that day. With the tiles you pick you come up with a poem. But pertaining to the poem I wrote. I would say it comes from a part of my past. The parts that is still a mystery to me. that is deep inside waiting to come out.'
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