酷我-北美枫

星子 · 发表于: 星期五五月 05, 2006 8:37 am 发表主题: Stain

Rumor has wings
as dandelion flying;
people love them,
except when it lands
on their own yard.

Each fall,
they cling to the ground,
pluck out the weeds,
but fail to clear the roots
in their hearts.

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期五五月 05, 2006 3:07 pm 发表主题:

people love them,
except landing on their own yard.
Very Happy

星子 · 发表于: 星期五五月 05, 2006 3:24 pm 发表主题:

There are webs,
Spun by spiders.
There are longitudes and woofs,
shuttling these shiny spirits.
The sentimental title and texture,
tears the black and the white.

But the wind doesn't care,
Blows up waste and trash.
There is no trace of harm,
It leaves empty holes behind.

-----sigh.........
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非马 · 发表于: 星期四六月 08, 2006 11:38 pm 发表主题:

星子好！

Each fall,
they (people?) cling to the ground,
plug out (plug up 堵住？or, do you mean "pluck up" 拔掉？)the weeds,

第二首诗里，
Blows up waste and trashes 的 "trash" 为不可数名词，似不该加"es"

星子 · 发表于: 星期五六月 09, 2006 8:20 am 发表主题:

Thanks 非马...

You are right.

This poem I knew was not good, so I didn't pay attention.

I edited it again.

Thanks.
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