酷我-北美枫

和平岛

《国事家事》

多伦多好, 岛好, 花斑猪好, 狗
年好——我们并没再多问天气
预报。老夫子绷着脸, 或
皱眉——不得而知, 但子曰:
见义不为，无勇也。
She did——在这里, 我犯了
人称指代的错误, 而动词又不甚明
朗。所以星子提出了一些
关于光线的疑问——
四射的芒, 刺得眼睛睁不开
我刚刚挣脱故纸堆的羁绊
我看到腐蓝的云衫, 一片片
脱落下来。我看见老夫子
一脸铁青。听说多伦多刚刮过
风暴。而海岛上空一丝不挂

National Incident

Good Morning, Toronto!
Hi, Island! Hi, piggy! Hi, Dog
Year——we didn’t ask about weather
forecast. Confucius appeared with a long face, or
frowned——not too sure about that, yet he said:
Hesitate to do the right, surely is pluckless.
She did——here I made a mistake
about the personal pronoun, and the verb is also
too ambiguous. So the little star put forward
some questions about light——
way too bright for the eyes
I just broke loose old piles of paper
I saw patches of blue clouds
falling down. The pedant was covered
with lividity, as a storm was reported to pass
by Toronto. Yet the sun shines all over the Island

2006-04-11

雪泥 · 发表于: 星期二四月 11, 2006 3:16 pm 发表主题:

David ， the English one needs more work
Especially the end Smile

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星子 · 发表于: 星期二四月 11, 2006 3:40 pm 发表主题:

我一般不看他的英文诗的。。。^^

我更喜欢简单的描述和表达。