酷我-北美枫

星子 · 酷我！I made it！ 注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto

It appears so public now.
People know me or not,
Flush to say hello.
From mortgage agents to car dealers,
From beauty salon to fashion promotions,
They never ask politely if they are allowed in.
The most waste guesses are “ the weight to lose” ,
for I am skinny as a streetlamp.
The most annoying burglars are the . advocators,
I am too shamed to open any.
And along, the horrible terrorists, those unknown virus,
Just image all in sudden, my system works improperly.

I try to filter them before receiving,
But they change their name tag in.
I hold my “delete” button,
and rush to remove them.
Click, click, click…
They are in the trash bin.
But what is the point?
Tomorrow, there are more coming.

高岸 · 发表于: 星期三八月 18, 2004 9:13 pm 发表主题:

充满真实生动的细节，不过，个人认为还是有点过于写实，虽然写实也是目前流行的风格，如能增加背后的内涵将可写出一首好诗。浅见，供参考。

星子 · 发表于: 星期四八月 19, 2004 9:08 am 发表主题:

hehe. All these emails just annoy me. Thus this flushes out.

Anyway, I will think it and take in your suggestion.