酷我-北美枫

星子 · 酷我！I made it！ 注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto

---------Colin Campbell------
Bring together worlds apart.
Artery of thoughts and trade.
Juxtaposed and counterpart.
Travel Silk Road unafraid.

Artery of thoughts and trade.
Ideas so much more than trade.
Travel Silk Road unafraid.
See the barriers start to fade.

Ideas so much more than trade.
Juxtaposed and counterpart.
See the barriers start to fade.
Bring together worlds apart.

星子 · 发表于: 星期三八月 18, 2004 10:52 am 发表主题:

----Translated By Anna--

世界不再分综，
架起文化和商务的通域。
并存和互换同荣，
丝绸之路无惧。

架起文化和商务的通域。
观念交流多于商旅。
丝绸之路无惧。
你看屏障退去。

观念交流多于商旅。
并存和互换同荣，
你看屏障退去。
世界不再分综，

Who want to try more? please share your comments.

Colin Campbell · 发表于: 星期四十月 07, 2004 6:34 am 发表主题:

I'm so grateful to Anna for translating my poem.

with kind regards
Colin 克林

星子 · 发表于: 星期四十月 07, 2004 10:31 am 发表主题:

Thanks Colin. This is my first try to translat other people's English poem.

I hope our forum will build the bridge for both sides.
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高岸 · 发表于: 星期六十月 09, 2004 7:18 pm 发表主题:

喜欢整体的翻译风格。有几个问题请教：
“分综”是何意？似不明确。不如直接用“分离”；
“架起。。。通域”好象不通顺。

星子 · 发表于: 星期二十月 12, 2004 10:06 am 发表主题:

Thank you for reading and critiques.

First I used "分离", but for rhyme I changed to "分综". This word I created it, now it seems not good. So maybe change it back.

This poem I think it is difficult to translate, I hope someone can help to improve.
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高岸 · 发表于: 星期三十月 13, 2004 8:12 am 发表主题:

“并存和互换同荣”是否翻成“求同存异”更贴近原意？

风动 · 发表于: 星期六十月 30, 2004 11:11 pm 发表主题:

Bring together worlds apart. 能否译成“世界大同”，与尾句RHYME？（个人浅见，不好别笑我）