酷我-北美枫

[星子]

--revision--

Nostalgia is a growing tree,
Its branches are over the tall fence.
I keep cutting and trimming them,
The falling fragments bedew my face.

The branches are over the tall fence,
For that lantern lit in a distant home.
Who keeps filling oil into it?
I am embedded in its light cocoon.

I keep immerging in it,
to wrap my shattered shadow inside.
The weeping willows bedew my face.
A growing tree, nostalgia is.

------old-(try to be a pantoum, but failed)


Nostalgia is a growing tree,
Its branches are over the tall fence.
I keep cutting and trimming them,
The falling fragments bedew my face.

The branches are over the tall fence,
For that lantern lit in the far.
Who keeps filling oil into it?
I am embedded in its light cocoon.

I keep cutting and trimming them,
To fade my shattered shadow inside.
The falling fragments bedew my face.
A growing tree, nostalgia is.

(which is better?)

[[ANNA]]

--revision--

Nostalgia is a growing tree,
Its branches are over the tall fence.
I keep cutting and trimming them,
The falling fragments bedew my face.

The branches are over the tall fence,
For that lantern lit in a distant home.
Who keeps filling oil into it?
I am embedded in its light cocoon.

I keep immerging in it,
to wrap my shattered shadow inside.
The weeping willows bedew my face.
A growing tree, nostalgia is.

------old-(try to be a pantoum, but failed)


Nostalgia is a growing tree,
Its branches are over the tall fence.
I keep cutting and trimming them,
The falling fragments bedew my face.

The branches are over the tall fence,
For that lantern lit in the far.
Who keeps filling oil into it?
I am embedded in its light cocoon.

I keep cutting and trimming them,
To fade my shattered shadow inside.
The falling fragments bedew my face.
A growing tree, nostalgia is.

(which is better?)

[高岸]

“Nostalgia is a growing tree”

Good imagination.

[[我还没有昵称]]

“Nostalgia is a growing tree”

Good imagination.

[wthomas]

“Nostalgia is a growing tree”
乡愁是破碎的、点点脑海的星光。

[[阿温]]

“Nostalgia is a growing tree”
乡愁是破碎的、点点脑海的星光。

[语风万里]

乡愁也是点点的无奈。
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。

[[爱谁谁]]

乡愁也是点点的无奈。
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。

[梅边吹笛]

哇闪，我不懂英语啊！
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[[瀑布]]

哇闪，我不懂英语啊！
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[星子]

Thanks all.

I posted 2 versions, hope you can let me know which is better.

[[ANNA]]

Thanks all.

I posted 2 versions, hope you can let me know which is better.