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星子 · 发表于: 星期三十二月 21, 2005 2:59 pm 发表主题: Early Spring

When snow quilts the valley,
unknowing sounds trickle beneath;
A frail stream and a few flapping ducklings.

In the blue twilight,
ahead of dawn,
cuckoos anxiously
awake the hibernating meadow.

"Ku-ku", "chi- chi"
with the soft melody,
my footprints crunch
to follow bushes stretching.

秋叶 · 发表于: 星期四十二月 22, 2005 7:00 pm 发表主题:

星子好诗，凄美的意境。

星子 · 发表于: 星期日十二月 25, 2005 11:59 am 发表主题:

Thanks a lot.
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雪泥 · 发表于: 星期一十二月 26, 2005 12:04 pm 发表主题: Re: Early Spring

a beautiful early spring painting,perhaps you should revise this line
'in the blue twilight', I think the adj.'blue' is not going well with 'twilight'.
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星子 · 发表于: 星期三十二月 28, 2005 11:30 pm 发表主题:

This poem depicts the Zhao Ning's oil paintings:

http://www.ningzhaoart.com/early%20spring.htm

& http://www.ningzhaoart.com/good%20morning.htm
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李拜六 · 发表于: 星期一三月 03, 2008 4:11 am 发表主题:

星子, 读过了。
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星子 · 发表于: 星期一三月 03, 2008 11:20 am 发表主题:

谢谢了.

我认为批评和交流是双刃剑. 这首我自己并不满意,但也懒于修改.

以往有几首被批得狠, 反而不断有动力改...效果很好.

不过有过几首,改得面目全非,反而失去灵性. 所以一切都在权衡之间以及开放的态度.
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dundas · 发表于: 星期一三月 03, 2008 1:35 pm 发表主题: Re: Early Spring

星子 · 发表于: 星期日三月 09, 2008 10:12 pm 发表主题:

Hi Dundas,

I know it. You are not picky. Thanks for comments.

I first wrote the poem and then my friend ZhaoNing suggested we may be work together to combine poem and painting. So I tried to fit it in . . . ( Embarassed

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ericcoliu · 发表于: 星期一三月 10, 2008 10:46 am 发表主题: Re: Early Spring

星子 · 发表于: 星期二三月 11, 2008 8:41 pm 发表主题:

Hi Eric,

Thanks.

Sometimes being alone means having time for meditation.
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