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Blue Ice[FAFAFA] Blue Ice作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2005-05-03 帖子: 146
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发表于: 星期日 十二月 11, 2005 4:40 pm 发表主题: Snowflake |
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Snowflake
‘Is it snow
or flower?’
the one is staring at
the other
in different eyes
I am catching different colors
one is gray
and the other is nacarat
雪花
‘是雪,
还是花?’
一个
注视着
另一个
从不同的眼睛
我捕捉到不同的色彩
一束沮丧的灰
一束
是鲜艳的橘红 |
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秋叶[我还没有昵称] 秋叶作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2004-05-20 帖子: 1633
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发表于: 星期二 十二月 13, 2005 3:29 am 发表主题: Re: Snowflake |
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Blue Ice 写到: | Snowflake
‘Is it snow
or flower?’
the one is staring at
the other
in different eyes
I am catching different colors
one is gray
and the other is nacarat
雪花
‘是雪,
还是花?’
一个
注视着
另一个
从不同的眼睛
我捕捉到不同的色彩
一束沮丧的灰
一束
是鲜艳的橘红 |
看久了会眼花的,该休息休息了。 |
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Blue Ice[FAFAFA] Blue Ice作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2005-05-03 帖子: 146
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发表于: 星期二 十二月 13, 2005 10:40 am 发表主题: |
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thanks 秋叶, i will
do you think this one is better?
Snowflake
Is it snow
or is it flower?
One is staring at
the other;
different eyes
catch different colors;
one is gray
the other nacarat.
这是我贴到西人网站后按他们建议改的. |
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雪泥[雪泥] 雪泥作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2005-10-12 帖子: 421 来自: 西欧
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发表于: 星期三 十二月 14, 2005 2:52 pm 发表主题: That is what I can guess |
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actually I have recited the original writing to my husband while he was by me,he said it sounded little odd,so do I. I think the second one is better
Blue Ice 写到: | thanks 秋叶, i will
do you think this one is better?
Snowflake
Is it snow
or is it flower?
One is staring at
the other;
different eyes
catch different colors;
one is gray
the other nacarat.
这是我贴到西人网站后按他们建议改的. |
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最后进行编辑的是 雪泥 on 星期三 十二月 14, 2005 11:50 pm, 总计第 2 次编辑 |
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Blue Ice[FAFAFA] Blue Ice作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2005-05-03 帖子: 146
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发表于: 星期三 十二月 14, 2005 10:55 pm 发表主题: |
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hi, Michelle Reisdorf, thanks for you comments. |
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