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语风万里

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随缘叹久违，
莫为打油悲。
做赋当玩乐，
茶杯作酒杯。
休闲不客套，
韵律有常规。
同室是幸甚，
吾侪定伴随。

< poem presented to visitor >

Nice to meet by lot,
Give Doggerel a kind eyelight.
To make verse flow with lark,
Tea cup act as goblet.
Take it easy when lie fallow,
Rhythm walk about usual rut.
It's a felicity to accompany you,
I will step on the footprint.
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。

语风万里 · 发表于: 星期三八月 11, 2004 10:58 am 发表主题: 客气了不是！

客气了不是！拍砖也欢迎，我戴着钢盔呢，来吧！我不怕砸！：）））
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。

星子 · 发表于: 星期三八月 11, 2004 12:51 pm 发表主题:

呵呵，就等你这句话。。

This translation is translated word by word, thus lose the readable meaning.

My suggestion is first try to translate the whole sentence by English way, then try to adjust it to be more rhythm. ( some words may cut off, if not fit in English way).

语风万里 · 发表于: 星期三八月 11, 2004 1:01 pm 发表主题:

谢谢星子！帮我做个例句师范可以吗？找其中的一句最不规范的来说明。谢谢啦！：）））
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。

星子 · 发表于: 星期三八月 11, 2004 1:11 pm 发表主题:

This poem is difficult to translate since it says too many things.
Some are very short chinese 成语或固定用语。
So also hard for me.

I guess better way is to try writting more and more english stuff, when you are more comfortable of English, then try to translate.

But still you can use simple chinese poem to practise translation.

never force yourself to translate.

语风万里 · 发表于: 星期三八月 11, 2004 1:16 pm 发表主题:

how about “茶杯作酒杯”in english poem? thank you !
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。

语风万里 · 发表于: 星期三八月 11, 2004 1:17 pm 发表主题:

i just want to try something first.
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漫是星光，曲水流觞，一肚花雕眼迷茫。

风过回廊，似歌吟唱，半院黄花满院香。