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Blue Ice[FAFAFA] Blue Ice作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2005-05-03 帖子: 146
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发表于: 星期六 八月 27, 2005 7:35 am 发表主题: The Cloud |
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The Cloud
I am the cloud, a piece of cloud
I don’t know where did I come from?
And where can I stay?
I forget that which was my mother language
And where is my country
Let me forget about my body,
and let it be as light as a leaf in the wind
Oh, I want to become a piece of cloud, to flow in the sky |
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Blue Ice[FFFFFF] Blue Ice作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2005-05-03 帖子: 146
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发表于: 星期六 八月 27, 2005 4:53 pm 发表主题: The Cloud (2) |
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The Cloud (2)
Why do you sing for a stone?
Could it be true that you don’t know the stone is cold?
Why do you sing for a bird?
Is it possible that you don’t know the bird will fly?
I hear the song under the moon
I saw everything in dark blue
Picked a wind-bell to stuff my ears
And looked at you from far away. Oh! My Muse
I know you are upset
But what could I do?
If the smile is the breathing
Well then, the tears will be the softest rain
If the sun is a stove
Then, the moon is the eye that stares at you
But tonight there is only the cloud
This is the only thing I can do
To wrap the pain of separation with cotton |
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朱新魁[FAFAFA] 朱新魁作品集 三品按察使 (天,你是斑竹吧?)
注册时间: 2004-10-18 帖子: 995 来自: 郑州市
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发表于: 星期日 八月 28, 2005 6:02 am 发表主题: |
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If the smile is the breathing
Well then, the tears will be the softest rain
If the sun is a stove
Then, the moon is the eye that stares at you
But tonight there is only the cloud |
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白水[FFFFFF] 白水作品集 一品翰林院大学士 (酷我!I made it!)
注册时间: 2004-05-16 帖子: 9025 来自: Toronto
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发表于: 星期日 八月 28, 2005 6:51 am 发表主题: |
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朱斑, 经你一改, 这诗歌拓宽了想象的空间, 也 拓宽了心绪. 又一番意境. 好! |
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Blue Ice[FAFAFA] Blue Ice作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2005-05-03 帖子: 146
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发表于: 星期日 八月 28, 2005 10:36 am 发表主题: |
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谢谢朱新魁, 贴一段英语诗坛的评论在这, 也算东西方文化交流吧:
Man, know how frustrating it is to read something good and have that nagging feeling that you've heard something like it somewhere else? That's me. I think with some work this could be made into a decent blues song. Kind of strikes a chord, hear what I'm saying?
由于文化背景不同, 我不能完全理解回帖人的心态, 但看得出TA从诗中读出了太多的伤感. 看来我是应剪掉那个小尾巴, 让诗歌欢快点
The Cloud (2)
Why do you sing for a stone?
Could it be true that you don’t know the stone is cold?
Why do you sing for a bird?
Is it possible that you don’t know the bird will fly?
I hear the song under the moon
I saw everything in dark blue
Picked a wind-bell to stuff my ears
And looked at you from far away. Oh! My Muse
I know you are upset
But what could I do?
If the smile is the breathing
Well then, the tears will be the softest rain
If the sun is a stove
Then, the moon is the eye that stares at you
But tonight there is only the cloud |
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和平岛[我还没有昵称] 和平岛作品集 一品翰林院大学士 (酷我!I made it!)
注册时间: 2004-05-16 帖子: 5614 来自: Victoria
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发表于: 星期日 八月 28, 2005 6:12 pm 发表主题: |
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the last part is really good |
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