酷我-北美枫

星子 · 发表于: 星期一八月 15, 2005 8:25 pm 发表主题: A beautiful mind

I want to write this
poem to you
before my door closes -

to make sure
the light in me
transfers to you -
blessings that filled,
take care of you

I wish your jouney
to brim with treasure -
that you would soon
forget the door behind.

---old--

Still, I want to write this
final poem to you
before my door silently closes.

I want to make sure
the light once lit me up
now transfers to you;
the blessings that filled me
now take care of you

--even not be felt

I wish the jouney that
you will go on
to be full of treasure;
and you could soon
disremember me behind.

朱新魁 · 发表于: 星期一八月 15, 2005 9:21 pm 发表主题:

拜读

icecanadaice · 发表于: 星期一八月 15, 2005 9:27 pm 发表主题:

very touching poem. i like it.

NO, I don't want to disremember you- a beautiful gril.(although I know this poem is not for me.)hahaha

白水 · 发表于: 星期一八月 15, 2005 11:01 pm 发表主题:

ME TOO

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期二八月 16, 2005 1:12 am 发表主题:

友情会是永远的

夏雨 · 发表于: 星期二八月 16, 2005 8:27 am 发表主题:

每天都在祝福声中，开始新的跋涉！
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一切都在改变，一切都是无常

星子 · 发表于: 星期二八月 16, 2005 6:43 pm 发表主题:

Thanks all.

Take care...
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countryroad · 发表于: 星期二八月 16, 2005 10:13 pm 发表主题:

好诗啊，花了半天时间终于撮摸透了。特将笔记录于此。权且凤尾续貂啦

学习星子英文诗歌笔录(1)
{

心扉关闭之前
还是让
这首诗飞出
(如鸽)

期盼君心似我
也有灵犀
一点
便充满
祝愿

愿君似锦前程
用不了太久
终将模糊这扇
记忆中的门

}

直译很难，又不能篡改原创，只能将就理解了。希望英文不好的网友谢谢我吧

朱新魁 · 发表于: 星期四八月 18, 2005 5:44 am 发表主题:

把门关闭之前
我要给你写一首诗