酷我-北美枫

蓝冰

My Friends-To New Immigrants

Are you my friend?
You look so tired
Please sit down on the chair
Drink a cup of water

Are you my friend?
You look so upset
Could I wipe the tears in your eyes?
Use the clean towel

Are you my friend?
You look so hurt
May I give you a hand?
I know that is weak and I wish it could help

I am not your family member
But I am your true friend
I know you are surprised
We don’t know each other

Something I can’t forget
When I just landed on this country
Once I was sick in the wilderness
Thirsty with high temperature
A stranger gives me a cup of water
I saw the water blooms like flower

In the chilly wind
The water became the Ice
Rise to the beautiful sky
Like a blue diamond

星子 · 发表于: 星期三三月 02, 2005 11:00 pm 发表主题:

My 2 cents. too much repetition sometimes a little boring...

keep on writing. Good luck.

蓝冰 · 发表于: 星期四三月 03, 2005 8:37 pm 发表主题:

Thanks start. I have changed a little

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期四三月 03, 2005 9:35 pm 发表主题:

不错
朋友握手

蓝冰 · 发表于: 星期四三月 03, 2005 10:31 pm 发表主题:

shake hands