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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期二 三月 24, 2009 9:38 am 发表主题: i HEAR Calliope Humming?!(Challenging Poem for Smart Readers |
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i HEAR Calliope Humming?! co-authored with ericcoliu
Dedicated to Rodney L. Eisenbrand whose rodryu constantly surprise me and whose latest rodryu entitled Rodryu stirs my emotions and imagination
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1 As a form of poetry, rodryu is Eisenbrand-esque senryu. One of Rodney L. Eisenbrand’s personal quotes is as follows: I can't always follow the rules so sometimes I break, umm.
2 Below are the poem text of Rodnyu by Rodney L. Eisenbrand and an excerpt from his reply to the comments on his poem:
Poem Text of Rodnyu
To be born with size
not having to wish other
wise and need extends.
An Excerpt from His Reply:
“Thanks everyone for the read and kind words, this is the only thing I have written in awhile, I need to draw in my thoughts they seem to have scattered lately, I cannot gather together anything coherent enough that I’m able to put it on paper.“ (emphasis mine)
3 Thinking of Li Bai While Waiting for Calliope is presequel to i HEAR Calliope Humming?!:
You promised
you would come to see me.
Through the lonely night,
I waited beneath the blossoms,
wondering if they kept their beauty
even when it was dark.
Raising my cup,
I enticed the moon,
for her, with my shadow
would make a party of three –
the moon knew
you were away from me.
Having never waited,
a woman like you
could hardly know
how long a night can be.
P.S. Any opinions, comments and especially critiques on i HEAR Calliope Humming?! would be much appreciated! _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy.
最后进行编辑的是 Champagne on 星期二 三月 24, 2009 3:38 pm, 总计第 1 次编辑 |
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ericcoliu[ericcoliu] ericcoliu作品集 二品总督 (刚入二品,小心做人)
注册时间: 2007-05-29 帖子: 1393 来自: GTA, Canada
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发表于: 星期二 三月 24, 2009 2:52 pm 发表主题: |
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There's nothing quite like a wordless poem with a hefty set of notes. LOL! _________________ Time is nothing but a disquiet of the soul |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期二 三月 24, 2009 8:01 pm 发表主题: |
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ericcoliu 写到: |
There's nothing quite like a wordless poem with a hefty set of notes. LOL! |
This is a demanding poem for readers who have active intelligent imaginations, and its notes function as sub-texts. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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川生[川生] 川生作品集 七品按察司 (我开始管这里的事儿了)
注册时间: 2008-09-18 帖子: 72
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发表于: 星期四 三月 26, 2009 12:27 pm 发表主题: |
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Champagne 写到: |
This is a demanding poem for readers who have active intelligent imaginations, and its notes function as sub-texts. |
Champagne 写到: |
Notes:
1 As a form of poetry, rodryu is Eisenbrand-esque senryu. One of Rodney L. Eisenbrand’s personal quotes is as follows: I can't always follow the rules so sometimes I break, umm.
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Indeed, this wordless poem challenge the reader's perception of what a poem really is. _________________ Lines go off in all directions. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期六 三月 28, 2009 8:48 am 发表主题: |
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Indeed, this wordless poem challenge the reader's perception of what a poem really is. |
This is my intent.
Thanks for your discerning eye. I immensely love the word of your choice: perception (may I shamelessly add one more word, understanding?) _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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浴恩福[浴恩福] 浴恩福作品集 六品通判 (官儿做大了,保持廉洁哦)
注册时间: 2008-05-08 帖子: 123 来自: 多倫多
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发表于: 星期六 三月 28, 2009 12:00 pm 发表主题: Re: i HEAR Calliope Humming?!(Challenging Poem for Smart Rea |
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Champagne 写到: |
“Thanks everyone for the read and kind words, this is the only thing I have written in awhile, I need to draw in my thoughts they seem to have scattered lately, I cannot gather together anything coherent enough that I’m able to put it on paper.“ (emphasis mine)
3 Thinking of Li Bai While Waiting for Calliope is presequel to i HEAR Calliope Humming?!:
You promised
you would come to see me.
P.S. Any opinions, comments and especially critiques on i HEAR Calliope Humming?! would be much appreciated! |
LOL! You've lost your Muse. i HEAR Calliope Humming? _________________ 報三恩、耕三大福田 |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期四 四月 02, 2009 3:35 pm 发表主题: Re: i HEAR Calliope Humming?!(Challenging Poem for Smart Rea |
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LOL! You've lost your Muse. i HEAR Calliope Humming? |
Thanks for your discerning eye/ear. Yes. I've temporarily lost my Muse. _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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东西[东西] 东西作品集 八品县丞 (又一个不小心,升了!)
注册时间: 2008-06-07 帖子: 53 来自: East_West
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发表于: 星期一 四月 06, 2009 12:46 pm 发表主题: Re: i HEAR Calliope Humming?!(Challenging Poem for Smart Rea |
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Champagne 写到: |
i HEAR Calliope Humming?!
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A poem without text?! Hmm ... interesting.
The way you use capitalization is very unusual. _________________ East is East, and West is West, and never the twain shall meet. |
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Champagne[Champagne] Champagne作品集 四品府丞 (封疆大吏也!)
注册时间: 2007-09-15 帖子: 394 来自: Nowhere & Everywhere
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发表于: 星期日 四月 12, 2009 3:20 pm 发表主题: |
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Thanks for your discerning eye.
Listen to John Cage's 4'33'' and his view of the music of silence.
John Cage’s 4'33'' --
the music flows
in silence
through the chambers of the heart _________________ I'm Champagne,
Bottled poetry with sparkling joy. |
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