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[浴恩福]

The original English: My Son, My Executioner by Donald Hall

My son, my executioner,
gggI take you in my arms,
Quiet and small and just astir,
gggAnd whom my body warms.

Sweet death, small son, our instrument
gggOf immortality,
Your cries and hunger document
gggOur bodily decay.

We twenty-five and twenty-two,
gggWho seemed to live forever,
Observe enduring life in you
gggAnd start to die together.



The Chinese Translation: 我兒，我的行刑者

我兒，我的行刑者。
我抱你在臂彎裡；
安靜，幼小，緩動，
並靠著我的身體取暖。

甘美的死亡，小兒 --
我們不朽的憑藉。
你的哭泣和飢餓記錄
我們肉體的衰殘。

我們，25和22歲，
看起來可活永世；
眼見生命持續於你，
便一同步向死亡。
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報三恩、耕三大福田

[[浴恩福]]

The original English: My Son, My Executioner by Donald Hall

My son, my executioner,
gggI take you in my arms,
Quiet and small and just astir,
gggAnd whom my body warms.

Sweet death, small son, our instrument
gggOf immortality,
Your cries and hunger document
gggOur bodily decay.

We twenty-five and twenty-two,
gggWho seemed to live forever,
Observe enduring life in you
gggAnd start to die together.



The Chinese Translation: 我兒，我的行刑者

我兒，我的行刑者。
我抱你在臂彎裡；
安靜，幼小，緩動，
並靠著我的身體取暖。

甘美的死亡，小兒 --
我們不朽的憑藉。
你的哭泣和飢餓記錄
我們肉體的衰殘。

我們，25和22歲，
看起來可活永世；
眼見生命持續於你，
便一同步向死亡。
_________________
報三恩、耕三大福田

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[christine]

Below is another version with an additional stanza:

(Note that the last stanza is bracketed. That’s not how the poem actually appears, but is because this stanza was originally the last stanza of this poem- as 1st published in the 1950s. In subsequent editions of books & anthologies DH axed the last stanza)

[I take into my arms the death
Maturity exacts,
And name with my imperfect breath
The mortal paradox.]

[[christine]]

Below is another version with an additional stanza:

(Note that the last stanza is bracketed. That’s not how the poem actually appears, but is because this stanza was originally the last stanza of this poem- as 1st published in the 1950s. In subsequent editions of books & anthologies DH axed the last stanza)

[I take into my arms the death
Maturity exacts,
And name with my imperfect breath
The mortal paradox.]

[浴恩福]

Thanks for the valuable information.

However, in my view, the bracketed last stanza of the original version lacks power to evoke interest through repetition of similar ideas, and it is a little melodramatic.
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報三恩、耕三大福田

[[浴恩福]]

Thanks for the valuable information.

However, in my view, the bracketed last stanza of the original version lacks power to evoke interest through repetition of similar ideas, and it is a little melodramatic.
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報三恩、耕三大福田