酷我-北美枫

星子 · 酷我！I made it！ 注册时间: 2004-06-05 帖子: 13192 来自: Toronto

The company I worked
back in China,
now, I only know two celebrities.
The other 30 or 40 more,
like nobody,
yet my old friends,
all have gone.

I wasn’t surprised by
the growth of the tree
without properly trimming and rooting,
nor wonder today
leaves fallen all in sudden.

The lush branches,
soon-to-be hollow logs,
the crooked way they grow,
the painful way to wither away.

---old one---
The company I worked back in China,
Now,I only know two celebrities.
The other 30 or 40 more,
like nobody,
yet my old friends,
all have gone.

I see the leaves quickly
fallen from that tree,
The lush branches
are soon-to-be hollow logs;
The easy way they grow,
the easy way to wither away.

何兆龙 · 发表于: 星期一二月 07, 2005 7:38 pm 发表主题:

你就是一棵树，走到那里，都会有绿叶绕着你。

星子 · 发表于: 星期一二月 07, 2005 7:46 pm 发表主题:

你把我比老树了?
_________________

何兆龙 · 发表于: 星期一二月 07, 2005 8:45 pm 发表主题:

我哪有写老字？不要栽赃噢！绿叶成枝，何言老？

星子 · 发表于: 星期一二月 07, 2005 10:27 pm 发表主题:

写这首是感慨当年的公司不得人心，人才纷纷走了。。。
读了却发现可产生歧意，
不知这是局限呢，还是可以接受?

自批一下?
_________________

和平岛 · 发表于: 星期一二月 07, 2005 11:05 pm 发表主题:

The easy way

何兆龙 · 发表于: 星期二二月 08, 2005 2:29 am 发表主题:

not ambiguous, ur old friends withered away, but u r a tree urself, there will be leaves and branches around u soon at next spring, friends are everywhere so long as u r friendly.

下雨的樟树 · 发表于: 星期二二月 08, 2005 12:34 pm 发表主题:

向你拜年了。向你全家问好。
_________________
http://miaoyong.poco.cn/

星子 · 发表于: 星期三二月 09, 2005 12:24 pm 发表主题:

I revised it, hope it more clear.
_________________