酷我-北美枫

非马

<橱窗>
胡的清作

从双层巴士的上层挤下身来
夹著公文包的少女匆匆横过

斑马线走过窜出冷气的咖啡馆
大减价的百货铺和挂满招贴画的

书报亭她的侧影在一家高级时装店
的橱窗前停了下来伫步凝神

橱窗里有一个石膏模特儿它的
侧面轮廓与她极其相似

用手扣了扣厚实的玻璃窗
扣了扣玻璃窗好像扣一扇门

没有人注意没有人知道她
是否走进那个假想的空间里去了

关于作者

胡的清生于湖南常德，现居珠海。中国作家协会会员。著有诗集《月的眼》(1991)、
《有些瞬间令我生痛》(1996) 、《梦的装置》(2000) 、《与命运拉钩》(2005)
及儿童诗集《童年巴士》(2004)。

A Display Window
by Hu Di-Qing

pushing her way down the upper deck of the bus
the girl with a black briefcase hastily crosses

the street after passing the coffeeshop spurting out whitish air
the department store with a big sale sign and the bookstand

with all kinds of hanging pictures she pauses
in front of a display window of a fashion shop staring

at a model of plaster whose sideview bears
a striking resemblance to her

she knocks at the thick heavy windowpane
knocking at it as if at a door

no one notices no one knows if she ever enters
the hypothetical space

(Translated by William Marr)

[About the Author]

Hu Diqing was born in Hunan, China. The author of five books of poems and
a member of the Chinese Writers Association. she now lives in Zhuhai, China.

English translation published in The Pedestal Magazine (Issue 35, Aug.21-Oct. 21, 2006)
http://www.thepedestalmagazine.com/

星子 · 发表于: 星期五九月 01, 2006 12:28 pm 发表主题:

very nice.

a big sale , or other wording better... ?

with all kinds of hanging pictures she pauses
in front of a display window of a fashion shop staring

she knocks at the thick heavy windowpane
knocking at it as if at a door

just wonder when to use ing and not? (it is my question, not critique)
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非马 · 发表于: 星期五九月 01, 2006 2:51 pm 发表主题:

谢谢星子。
a big sale sign有两重意义:一是大减价(big sale)的牌子，二是大的减价牌子。
she knocks at the thick heavy windowpane
knocking at it as if at a door
后一行本该是(and keeps) knocking at it as if (she was knocking) at a door
把括号里的字省略掉，意思依然明显。

星子 · 发表于: 星期五九月 01, 2006 9:23 pm 发表主题:

谢谢非马的解答。。。

我是不懂就问的人。我写诗也是勇气十足。学习也要这样的勇气。

白羊座不怕被批，也不怕失面子。

西方朋友说的好，最怕的是那种装懂不懂的人
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非马 · 发表于: 星期六九月 02, 2006 6:45 am 发表主题:

星子好！这也是我一向抱持的态度。也只有这样才能不断进步吧。
东方人一般较爱面子，很少能真正做到不耻下问。我接触到的西方人在这方面似乎好些。

长篙 · 发表于: 星期日九月 10, 2006 2:02 am 发表主题:

胡是俺真正的老乡,欣赏最后两句,把读者带到童话般的意境中.却又淡进淡出,毫不在意.言简意巧.
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