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[唐夫]

一首英诗的翻译，原作和意译的三位作者和三种形态在下，供诗友评鉴。

一

太傻

Melody（台湾）

我明白我在等待
一直等到妳有時間
可以與我共度良宵
如果我們找個地方跳舞
我知道機會一定存在
妳不會離我而去
跳完舞，找個安靜的小地方
一起把酒言歡

之後我鼓起勇氣，放膽行事
說些蠢話
就像「我愛你」

在妳眼中我看得出妳的不屑
每晚都有人對妳老調重彈
雖然對妳而言這不過是一句話
對我而言卻如此真切
我們之間感覺從未如此美妙

日復一日我勤加練習
想出一些絕妙好辭說給妳聽
努力讓我的心意成真
但後來我想還是稍安勿躁
直到夜色漸深
我倆獨處
時機成熟

我滿腦子都是妳的香水味兒
星光閃耀，夜涼如水
之後我鼓起勇氣，放膽行事
說些蠢話
就像「我愛妳」
我愛妳...
我愛妳.....
我愛妳.......

二

附原文:

<Something Stupid>

Robbie Williams & Nicole Kidman

I know I stand in line
Until you think you have the time
To spend an evening with me
And if we go someplace to dance
I know that there's a chance
You won't be leaving with me
Then afterwards we drop into a quiet little place
And have a drink or two
And then I go and spoil it all
By saying something stupid
Like "I love you"

I can see it in your eyes
That you despise the same old lines
You heard the night before
And though it's just a line to you
For me it's true
And never seemed so right before

I practice every day to find some clever
lines to say
To make the meaning come through
But then I think I'll wait until the evening
gets late And I'm alone with you

The time is right
Your perfume fills my head
The stars get red
And oh the night's so blue
And then I go and spoil it all
By saying something stupid
Like "I love you"

The time is right
Your perfume fills my head
The stars get red and oh, the night’s so blue
And then I go and spoil it all
By saying somethin’ stupid
Like I love you

I love you
I love you
I love you


三

修译

唐夫

我在迷幻的思索中 等你走来
走进翩翩起舞的神秘良宵
我渴望 那样的幽会是一场痛饮

沉溺着看你 像荧火般痴迷
好像照亮了漫不经心的神情
你有过吗？我那刻骨铭心的祈语

渴望翻滚 在我的海洋般心底
触动的身影在蓝色的寂夜
草坪和林荫以及香槟的碰击

抚摩良辰美景的双手贴上我的脸庞
面红耳赤的星星在繁空的子夜
聆听着溺爱的嘴唇 哼出 呢喃小语

“矮啦唔哟！”………。

2006-7-1

[[唐夫]]

一首英诗的翻译，原作和意译的三位作者和三种形态在下，供诗友评鉴。

一

太傻

Melody（台湾）

我明白我在等待
一直等到妳有時間
可以與我共度良宵
如果我們找個地方跳舞
我知道機會一定存在
妳不會離我而去
跳完舞，找個安靜的小地方
一起把酒言歡

之後我鼓起勇氣，放膽行事
說些蠢話
就像「我愛你」

在妳眼中我看得出妳的不屑
每晚都有人對妳老調重彈
雖然對妳而言這不過是一句話
對我而言卻如此真切
我們之間感覺從未如此美妙

日復一日我勤加練習
想出一些絕妙好辭說給妳聽
努力讓我的心意成真
但後來我想還是稍安勿躁
直到夜色漸深
我倆獨處
時機成熟

我滿腦子都是妳的香水味兒
星光閃耀，夜涼如水
之後我鼓起勇氣，放膽行事
說些蠢話
就像「我愛妳」
我愛妳...
我愛妳.....
我愛妳.......

二

附原文:

<Something Stupid>

Robbie Williams & Nicole Kidman

I know I stand in line
Until you think you have the time
To spend an evening with me
And if we go someplace to dance
I know that there's a chance
You won't be leaving with me
Then afterwards we drop into a quiet little place
And have a drink or two
And then I go and spoil it all
By saying something stupid
Like "I love you"

I can see it in your eyes
That you despise the same old lines
You heard the night before
And though it's just a line to you
For me it's true
And never seemed so right before

I practice every day to find some clever
lines to say
To make the meaning come through
But then I think I'll wait until the evening
gets late And I'm alone with you

The time is right
Your perfume fills my head
The stars get red
And oh the night's so blue
And then I go and spoil it all
By saying something stupid
Like "I love you"

The time is right
Your perfume fills my head
The stars get red and oh, the night’s so blue
And then I go and spoil it all
By saying somethin’ stupid
Like I love you

I love you
I love you
I love you


三

修译

唐夫

我在迷幻的思索中 等你走来
走进翩翩起舞的神秘良宵
我渴望 那样的幽会是一场痛饮

沉溺着看你 像荧火般痴迷
好像照亮了漫不经心的神情
你有过吗？我那刻骨铭心的祈语

渴望翻滚 在我的海洋般心底
触动的身影在蓝色的寂夜
草坪和林荫以及香槟的碰击

抚摩良辰美景的双手贴上我的脸庞
面红耳赤的星星在繁空的子夜
聆听着溺爱的嘴唇 哼出 呢喃小语

“矮啦唔哟！”………。

2006-7-1

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“矮啦唔哟！”………。

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“矮啦唔哟！”………。

呵呵，有趣，问好
_________________
＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝＝
诗观：求真、扬善、尚美。
博客 http://hk.netsh.com/eden/blog/ctl_eden_blog.phpiBlogID=1254593
个人空间:http://bbs.shigebao.com/blog/index.php?action/space/uid/18273