酷我-北美枫

Hi folks,

I'd much appreciate any feedback on my attempt at translating
a little English poem of mine.

永和平梦想
生存只短命
在尽善尽美
而后消失快
有如忘前途

A dream of peace.
There for a moment,
a thing of beauty.
Then faded away
like the forgotten
hopes of youth.

谢谢您
Colin

.
机上外星人的飞船

我突然病了

所以请求咨询医生

他们说呆呆

但是可以咨询兽医

Hi folks, sorry to be away for so long.

This little piece started life as a piece of micro fiction and is currently in print in the Leaf Books Anthology, The Final Theory and Other Stories (UK). I thought it might be fun to try it in Hanyu. Here’s the English version:

I took ill on the alien transport and asked to see the doctor.
"Don't be silly," they said, "but you can see the veterinarian."

With kind regards
Colin

恬静的云南

很有风今天
风筝究青天
舟游于滇池
有游鱼溅开

Peaceful Yunnan.

Now the wind is high
kites explore the sky.
Boats explore Dianchi
fish are splashing too.

Dianchi Lake

Nature’s treasure, Dianchi Lake.
Living water, nature’s lifeblood.
Timeless winds blow over water.
Dianchi is a water world.

Living water, nature’s lifeblood.
Setting sun on the inland sea.
Dianchi is a water world.
Windsong and the setting sun.

Setting sun on the inland sea.
Timeless winds blow over water.
Windsong and the setting sun.
Nature’s treasure, Dianchi Lake.

Yunnan in the sun
where people are warm in the
land south of the clouds

South of the clouds.
Ancestors’ heritage
Strong and diverse.
A treasure to treasure.

Ancestors’ heritage
Living in harmony
A treasure to treasure.
Yunnan in the sun.

Living in harmony
Strong and diverse.
Yunnan in the sun.
South of the clouds.

A star is rising again in the east.
Remember the Tang and the Song.
Thank God it’s rising peacefully.
Now there’s a bit of a novelty.

Remember the Tang and the Song.
A new golden age is rising again.
Now there’s a bit of a novelty.
Have we ever seen that before?

A new golden age is rising again.
Thank God it’s rising peacefully.
Have we ever seen that before?
A star is rising again in the east.

Bring together worlds apart.
Artery of thoughts and trade.
Juxtaposed and counterpart.
Travel Silk Road unafraid.

Artery of thoughts and trade.
Ideas so much more than trade.
Travel Silk Road unafraid.
See the barriers start to fade.

Ideas so much more than trade.
Juxtaposed and counterpart.
See the barriers start to fade.
Bring together worlds apart.