酷我-北美枫

[星子]

Root carving

This tree falls
in the echoes of the saw,
roots pulled up roughly.

A pair of dedicated hands
then chisel it
until its historical strength reappears.

Those dying once resilient parts,
survived many flashes of lightning,
before our admiring eyes,
framed as a symbol of beauty and life.

We cuddle our heart –
in layers upon layers of cold soil,
transplanted again and again,
the hardship beyond anyone’s touch.


这棵树在锯声中倒下，
不久就要连根拔起。

经一双精巧的手慢慢雕凿，
它重现地底下的苍虬。

将死却益发刚劲的枝,
逃过了无数次雷击,
如今休憩于人们的顶礼,
凝成美的定格和观摩.

我们捂紧被冻土
层层包裹的心，
一次次移植，
不为人触摸的沧桑。
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[[ANNA]]

Root carving

This tree falls
in the echoes of the saw,
roots pulled up roughly.

A pair of dedicated hands
then chisel it
until its historical strength reappears.

Those dying once resilient parts,
survived many flashes of lightning,
before our admiring eyes,
framed as a symbol of beauty and life.

We cuddle our heart –
in layers upon layers of cold soil,
transplanted again and again,
the hardship beyond anyone’s touch.


这棵树在锯声中倒下，
不久就要连根拔起。

经一双精巧的手慢慢雕凿，
它重现地底下的苍虬。

将死却益发刚劲的枝,
逃过了无数次雷击,
如今休憩于人们的顶礼,
凝成美的定格和观摩.

我们捂紧被冻土
层层包裹的心，
一次次移植，
不为人触摸的沧桑。
_________________

[星子]

谢谢非马的建议.

好多了
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢非马的建议.

好多了
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[非马]

星子好！
wrapped in layers up layers of cold soil 里的 up 似乎该是 upon

[[FAFAFA]]

星子好！
wrapped in layers up layers of cold soil 里的 up 似乎该是 upon

[星子]

谢谢非马老师...

我又改了一点,,,想把它表现更明确一点...不知可行?
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[[ANNA]]

谢谢非马老师...

我又改了一点,,,想把它表现更明确一点...不知可行?
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[Lake]

发现这是精华帖，定当一读。

The photo is great, the poem is symbolic. I see where the inspiration comes from. I really like it.

I only have a problem with this line:

[[Lake]]

发现这是精华帖，定当一读。

The photo is great, the poem is symbolic. I see where the inspiration comes from. I really like it.

I only have a problem with this line:

[星子]

Thanks Lake. Good catch. (I will explain....)

The translation is not tightly matched, I know.

I slightly changed my English version since I found it better as it be. (^ ^)



Those dying once resilient parts (Could be read

Those dying, once resilient parts

(not as the same meaning as Chinese one)
I mean the roots will die soon , but in the past, no matter how many tragedies, they recovered...)

We cuddle our heart ( tense is present) Mean we watch and think of us...then cuddle our heart...

Transplanted... (means our heart being transplanted again...and again...)

So you know what I mean?

Do you still have question?

Please let me know.

This is a reflection of immigrant.

Thanks.
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[[ANNA]]

Thanks Lake. Good catch. (I will explain....)

The translation is not tightly matched, I know.

I slightly changed my English version since I found it better as it be. (^ ^)



Those dying once resilient parts (Could be read

Those dying, once resilient parts

(not as the same meaning as Chinese one)
I mean the roots will die soon , but in the past, no matter how many tragedies, they recovered...)

We cuddle our heart ( tense is present) Mean we watch and think of us...then cuddle our heart...

Transplanted... (means our heart being transplanted again...and again...)

So you know what I mean?

Do you still have question?

Please let me know.

This is a reflection of immigrant.

Thanks.
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[Lake]

Thanks 星子 for your explanation.

[[Lake]]

Thanks 星子 for your explanation.

[星子]

Thanks....

survived... happend in the past....(lightning)

Framed...(be framed... root carving)

We (CFP and TOPS ) have local workshop and reading poem session closed to lakeshore/ 3th line...each month.

If you want, you are welcome to come and share your piece.
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[[ANNA]]

Thanks....

survived... happend in the past....(lightning)

Framed...(be framed... root carving)

We (CFP and TOPS ) have local workshop and reading poem session closed to lakeshore/ 3th line...each month.

If you want, you are welcome to come and share your piece.
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[Lake]

Thanks for inviting me over, 星子. Poetry workshops, hummm... sounds like a fun place. But what do CFP and TOPS stand for? I am not sure if I can make it, though I really want to.

[[Lake]]

Thanks for inviting me over, 星子. Poetry workshops, hummm... sounds like a fun place. But what do CFP and TOPS stand for? I am not sure if I can make it, though I really want to.